Feedback Unit 2

 Hi Zeba!


I appreciated how the first thing that I saw when clicking on your webpage was a visual of children and the age range that would be discussed. However, that seemed to be the only heading that was provided. A recommendation for the improved structure of the webpage would be to include subheadings that will introduce the readers to the information that will follow. I also liked how you did not make one big paragraph of writing, but instead split them up into manageable portions to allow for better ease of reading. One suggestion is to make sure that you proofread your work before submitting/publishing. There were a few grammatical errors throughout the writing, which caused me to have to add in words that were missing when reading. Another recommendation would be to utilize transitional words throughout your writing. Some of the paragraphs didn’t flow well, and I think a transitional word would’ve brought everything together.

 

I appreciated how the information on your webpage gave a constant comparison of development between girls and boys, and how you made sure to speak about physical, psychosocial, and emotional changes that the age group experience. This information could be considered useful for healthcare providers, because it reports on the various changes that will occur with children within that age range. This allows for better assessment of individuals and observations of typical or delayed development. Overall, I enjoyed reading through your webpage, viewing pictures, and watching videos. My last suggestion would be to make sure you view the criteria for the assignments, as if required 5 photos but only 3 were provided.


Brittany 

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